Audience Feedback- First draft of film

I showed my class teacher the first draft of my short film and generally her comments were very positive.


She praised me for having a range of shots, with interesting types of lighting, and for making the film in such a way that she was interested in the character and wanted to know more about her.


The bits of the film she said I could improve on was the transition from the first shot to the second as I was filming the same footpath but the camera moved slightly so the positioning of the shots weren't perfect.


In the section of the film where Tina is sitting on the sofa, my teacher commented on the order of the shots. My shots were quite mis matched- I had a long shot then a close up then a mid shot. Instead, she told me to get gradually closer to the character so I changed the order of the shots from long shot to extreme close up- this looks slicker and the film now flows more fluently.


The title sequence at the start of the film is in the style of a typewriter so each individual word appears one after the other. I was told to either find a classic typewriting font or, for coherency issues, to keep the same font I used on my poster.